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Hatsune Miku by hungry4ramen

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I have a tendency to write way too much, so I'll try to make this as short as possible. (i said try!) o3o;; Also, don't take any offense to whatever I might say - it's all for your improvement, which I can see a lot of in your recent drawings. So bear with me!

Her pose is very cute - matches well with the theme. I just wish there was more expression in her eyes - maybe if she had eyebrows it'd look better? Her neck is also a little too twisted back; if you really wanted her head to be that far back, her whole body should tilt back as well.

Her lower half looks good - I'm just wondering where her knees are.

I like how her bangs are quite spiky, but the main problem here is the ponytails. Her hair needs to flow a little bit more to look natural.

Let's start with ponytail A - the flow is fine, but the big crack on the left makes it look awkward, like her stylist was having a little too much fun with the hair gel and decided to shoot pens through it. It was a good experiment, but you should try to make the gaps smaller or try making gaps with thinner strands of hair. does that make any sense? o3o;;

Ponytail B - it looks as if her hair was naturally wavy and one side of the ponytail was straightened and the other was left natural. Try to be a little more consistent with your drawings! >3<

I have no problems with the colouring, well done! The blush in her cheek on her left is slightly lower than the one on her right, though. o3o I really like how you coloured her eyes, too. The highlights give a really glassy effect which makes it very aesthetically appealing!

The concept is really cute! I do like the very simple and girly background you've chosen. Overall, it's a very cute and pleasant drawing - it may not be detailed, but it's very nice.
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hungry4ramen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
owo gracias~ o3o don't worry, your critiques are quite helpful!

yes i know - the inconsistency kills the man me.

indeed i will review all your wonderful advice, idol
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erendipity Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
i actually want to make that a game. shoot pens through miku's hair.

yay sorry i'm such a bitch
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hungry4ramen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yes let's.

no you aren't
even frost says so

I should thank you :iconuhuhuhuplz:


:iconjack-frostplz: :iconholdfeelsplz:
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erendipity Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
nope nope shut up

hey when did frost get involved in this anyway

oh well :iconjack-frostplz:

still want :iconamgtouchplz:

oh hey i have dvds and vcds i need to lend you badly yo they might involve a certain sexy beast with the name mario maurer
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hungry4ramen Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
welp make me

because tooth fairy and sandy and bunnymund and russian north and pitch and mario maurer


wait what

did you say mario maurer

:iconholdfeelsplz:
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erendipity Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
no no of course not i did not say dave's look-a-like's name

welp

i don't know about you but i'm starting to feel like the name maurer is like my last name with a terrible asian accent and an l lisp you know
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hungry4ramen Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You just did now did you

Gosh he does look like him lol


Omfg yes yes

Asian lithpth lisps are pretty
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erendipity Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012
i wish dave had pictures online, i want to edit a photo to put them together. they're both so adorable, whyyy?

i feel like my last name is thekthy sexy now
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